Traffic was the same as usual, a few cars had moved the night before. Caden noted how the window was becoming increasingly covered in dust, more and more as the seconds went by. He opened an envelope left on his desk, and read. "Alright listeners, I have some more local news for you, straight from the envelope of Gary the Intern. Oh, lovely! It seems there is a new face in town, and he has proclaimed himself to be God. To prove this, he has brought life back to a dead tree, summoned lightning, and risen above the heads of a few of our dear listeners. Luckily our lovely Dusk Haven police force has taken him into custody and taken care of him. Wonderful!" Caden tosses the letter into a pile near his desk. "Well, my dear listeners, our respected Chief of Police has recently sent his agents to inspect us, and they have asked me to remind you that the List of Approved Names has been updated, so if you're planning on risking having a child, make sure you check it out!" A knock on the door startles him, and Caden pauses. "I'm sorry, my dear listeners, but we seem to have a Visitor...I think I'll welcome him in." Caden stands, fixes his tie, and opens the door. Standing there isn't Gary the intern, nor his boss. It was Lucas, the green-eyed reporter from who-knows-where. Caden blinks in surprise, and clears his throat. "Um, hello Lucas, may I help you...?" he asks as the pause music plays on in the background, some sort of techno or maybe rap, Caden had no clue. Lucas nods and takes a pencil from behind his ear, holding up a notebook. "I was wondering if I could sit in on your show, to see whats what in Dusk Haven." Caden was surprised. Another person (if he WAS a person) in Caden's little office...? Well, why not? Caden ushers him inside, and has him sit where he wants. Sitting at the microphone, Caden Lucius once again speaks to his listeners. "I do apologize, my dear listeners, but our guest had a bit of business he needed to clear up. Now, back to what you're all here for; another Slide Monster Update. According to our Interns, the Slide that the monster resides in has taken up Mr. Allistair's parking space in the Radio Stations parking lot. We will continue to observe it and avoid it with all the fear we can muster."
Caden speaks on, doing what he does best. Lucas watches with a keen eye, and listens with a deft ear. Caden watches him scribble on, and as he finishes the day, Lucas comes up and shakes his hand, and walks out. Caden looks up, and smiles slyly. "Now this...Is not your average happening in Dusk Haven."
Never fails to intrigue me. This sounds like a movie that I would love to watch! Kind of like The Hunger Games or something like that?
ReplyDeleteSo I'm seeing a little more purpose behind some of the plot. I do have more questions about the backstory though: the list of approved names, the child bearing, the guy who appeared as God then disappears, the police force.
ReplyDeleteFor a story to hold together these things have to go slower and be more developed. That way your readers don't suffer whiplash. You've been writing for a while so you know how to weave words. You just need some work on structure and development. :)